Ms. Loasby's feed back/ Essay test date info.

Hi 12s,

Below you will find Ms.L's feedback on the test. 
I wanted to ask you to watch this space today and tomorrow for confimation of your essay date. You will be writing either April 12th or April 16th.  We will confirm with you here by tomorrow.
Ms.S

Exam feedback

M/C

-Sexual assault: whose responsibility is it?

The perpetrator’s (the person committing the crime)à Andy

Written response

-Organizationà transitions

-Evidenceà in-text citation (Anderson 2)

             à relate to main point and support it

             à explanation: go deep!

-Avoid retelling plot details

-Mechanicsà sentence structure (Melinda… Melinda… Melinda… Melinda…)

                   à Run-on sentences & incomplete sentences

-Expressionà colloquial (too informal/ verbal)